On a recent bout with WriteClubFightClub a comment was left about how a good story doesn’t need profanity. My story used two swear words, the s-word (once) and the f-word (twice), probably the reason why someone chose “neither” instead of voting for a story.
I was really tempted to write a response justifying my language but I decided that would be a bad idea. Everyone has an opinion and that reader was simply mentioning theirs. I don’t necessarily agree but that’s just my opinion.
I could probably find a list of the classic novels that include some form of profanity but honestly that wouldn’t change anyone’s mind or even necessarily make my point. To me, swear words are just words, which means there’s a use for them just like any other word. Also, just like any other word, they can be overused or misused. I either use them or avoid them depending on the type of writing I’m doing and the potential audience.
In my story, Closing Time, the main character is a nurse who is at the end of a long, arduous, 16-hour day. I wanted her to come across as worn, annoyed, exhausted, even petty at times. She’d been in the trenches, probably been covered in blood and other bodily fluids all day, dealing with “emergencies” around every corner, at the end of her proverbial rope when she’s given just one more little job. To me, the occasional swear word was appropriate for her. I could have easily left those three swear words out but I thought they were more authentic than softer alternatives and I liked that edge they gave her voice. They weren’t used that often either, there were three swear words in five pages of text, just enough to add a little spice without being overwhelming.
But, of course, that’s a matter of opinion and everyone is entitled to theirs.
So, speaking of opinions, I would love to get some more on swear words, or specifically on the word choice for Closing Time. Were the “bad” words overused, misused, do they distract from the story? Were they acceptable but it could have been better without them? Good, bad, something in between? I would really appreciate honest feedback. Follow the links, let me know what you think, good or bad.